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Writing Challenge: Papa Says -About Me

18 Jun

BethAt uni we were asked to compose a few paragraphs and then edit it down to make a few sentences which then became our personal statement, well this weeks writing challenge is all about reducing needless text when writing so all of that came flooding back. It suggested taking an old post and heavily editing one paragraph to see what you are left with; so…I went as old as I could…back to the start…my about me page https://comfortablynumb7.wordpress.com/about/

Original:

‘So this is my blog, firstly explaining the back story (which by the way I have done in separate posts, as trying to condense over a years worth of stuff into one was never going to happen…so for part 1 click here) and how these revelations came to light, but mainly as a place for me to express myself, a place to grieve the loss of our past, to document the trials we are sure to go through and to hopefully discover that we aren’t alone in this.’

TaaDaa:

 ‘I blog to grieve our past, express our present and discover our future’

I think that pretty much says it all don’t you? 😉

xBx

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7 responses to “Writing Challenge: Papa Says -About Me

  1. beetleypete

    June 18, 2013 at 9:09 am

    OK, here’s my version.
    ‘Moany old sod, lives in Norfolk. used to have a job.’
    Done.
    As ever, Pete. X

     
    • beetleypete

      June 18, 2013 at 9:10 am

      (Yours is a lot better B. X)

       
    • Comfortably Numb

      June 18, 2013 at 11:13 am

      Pahahaha 🙂

       
    • Comfortably Numb

      June 18, 2013 at 11:14 am

      You know you could edit that further “retired Norfolk resident – moans” lol

       
      • beetleypete

        June 18, 2013 at 3:20 pm

        Makes me sound much nicer, when you put it like that. X

         
  2. Donna Gwinnell Weidner

    June 19, 2013 at 8:42 pm

    Short, sweet, and to the point…love it! And you…in a sista’ly way, of course. I am so happy to be seeing so much progress being made! You rock!

     

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